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437 No. 437
Play if you want. This is just for fun. No seriousness involved.

Option 1 (normal modo):
>go to http://us.akinator.com/
>say you are an anime character
>answer questions with your own info
>use that as a new persona for the rest of this thread.

Option 2 (fun modo):
>go to http://us.akinator.com/
>say you are an anime/fictional/manga character
>type in the characteristics you want
>use that as new persona for the rest of the thread.
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>> No. 611
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>>629
I may have to legitimately consider that.
>> No. 612
I kinda want a newsboy cap. So I can look like a little boy from the 20th century.
>> No. 613
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Welcome Lili.
Also:
Are you guys gonna remove my edits from teaparty and gameboard? No, really I felt honored when I watched them, but they are way too big.
Maybe we should select something else? the piecenofun.jpg would do nice on teaparty

>> No. 614
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Come to think of it, what if I combined a fedora with that one sexy coat I have packed away?
>> No. 615
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>>632
I'm not sure about everyone else, but personally i'm rather fond of the Kanontroll, even if it may be a tad bit oversized. Over time, it's become somewhat of a representative image for /seacats/ to me.
>> No. 616
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>>631
Newsboy caps are for girls these days! A real man doesn't wear anything a girl would wear, so reconsider!

>>633
Do it.
>> No. 617
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>>635
...What does the coat look like again?
>> No. 618
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>Talks about Fedoras
Gentlemen.
>> No. 619
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>>634
I believe the size is part of the joke, anyways if you guys like it then it doesn't bother me, I just didn't wanted you to get tired of it.
>> No. 620
>>635
So you are encouraging a little girl to wear a tophat that spans several stories.
>> No. 621
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>>636
I need to tell you what YOUR coat looks like?

>>639
You're a GIRL?!
>> No. 622
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>>640
I haven't really worn it, so yes.
>> No. 623
>>640
Why, yes; look at this dainty figure and my petite chest.
>> No. 624
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>>641
You should explore your wardrobe more.

>>642
Petite = Flat?

Well, I'll leave the inquisition to Maggie. She'll probably be all Kyaaaa~ and try to woo you.
>> No. 625
>>643
What is a Maggie?
>> No. 626
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>>644
You'll find out.
>> No. 627
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>>643
You really didn't knew? Oh wel-
>and try to woo you.
please elaborate
>> No. 628
What is a Maggie?!
>> No. 629
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629
Finally finished my most recent short story. Those spoiler tags on the previous board were much more useful, since you could click on them instead of having to hover over them.

I can go ahead and post it anyway if anybody would like to read it, and perhaps offer some constructive criticism?
>> No. 630
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630
I can't find it...
>> No. 631
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>>648
I would like to read it.
>> No. 632
>Try fun mode
>Shannon/Sayo is the fifth result
>> No. 633
I have a house; it’s a lovely little place. It’s neither too big nor too small. It’s warm enough that I don’t feel the cold, but not unpleasantly hot either. The furniture is quite comfortable, as well. I’m especially fond of the big chair near the window in the living room. That chair is my chair. Nobody else sits on my chair, so it’s mine alone.
In this house which is neither luxurious nor austere there live four rather silly people, and myself. First there is the mother; she’s a very silly lady. Always fussing about her appearance or getting worked up over trivial things. I’ve never before seen a woman who would get so worked up over the slightest little things. She has such a short temper sometimes. She really needs to learn to take it easy, I think.
Then there is the fat bald man. He’s quite a lazy person. He does things which upset the lady, so those two don’t get along very well. He’s always doing or saying things which he shouldn’t, so he gets yelled at a lot. I don’t think those two get along very well.
There are also two brothers living here. The younger brother is a very boisterous child. He’s loud and irritating, and very messy as well. He sometimes sits in my comfortable chair by the window. I don’t like him very much.
The older brother is my favourite of the four people. We’re very alike, you see. I know everything about him, and he knows all about me. We spend a lot of time together simply sitting around the house relaxing, or watching people walk by on the street from his bedroom window. The window looks down on the garden, and past that you can see the street all the way to the houses lined up on the other side of the road. I’m quite fond of that garden; it’s a pleasant place to relax on a nice sunny day.
That person seems so very lonely sometimes, though. I’m with him all the time, but he still seems so distant even after the six years we’ve spent together. His eyes have such a forlorn look to them. They often make him seem rather hollow, in a way. Like a puppet that’s been cast aside or a discarded mannequin that serves no purpose any more. I feel sorry for him, so I often try to comfort him. I know there’s little I can do for him, however.
One day, that person said something to me.
“You know what, Mia?” he asked me, a quizzical look spreading across his face. “I wish I could be a cat, sometimes.”
That statement confused me a little, so I didn’t know how to respond. I merely gave him a blank look and tilted my head to one side. He gave a slight giggle, but said no more. Instead he threw his arms out to his sides, and flopped gracefully – well, about as gracefully as a person is able to flop - back onto his bed.
He lay there for hours as he does every other day, simply staring at his ceiling thinking about things I’m not able to understand, or maybe just things he doesn’t want to put into words. I wish there was something I could do to comfort him, anything at all, but instead all I could do was lay beside him on his bed and stay silent as he kept all of his thoughts, all of his feelings, bottled up inside.
We two lay there for hours, simply enjoying the frail silence while it lasted. In this house, silence was a rare treasure. Something precious which one does not come across very often. So, we treasured moments like these. He seems to value this silence the most; that relaxed, gentle look on his face shows clearly the way he savours these moments. When I look at him like this, he seems to give off an air of handsome maturity more befitting of a man many times his own age, perhaps. That usual world-weary aura around him gives way to his true gentle nature in these moments alone.
While we share many similarities, we’re altogether very different from each other. While he has all of these problems and worries, I have no worries at all and lead a relatively simple, lazy life. In spite of that though, I think I’m able to understand him better than most. Even if his troubles and problems seem far-off or unfamiliar to me, I like to think I’m at least able to understand what kind of person he really is beneath all of that. He’s really such a kind and generous person, that’s the reason I often have trouble understanding what could possibly be weighing on his mind all the time.
A sudden noise shatters the fragile silence the two of us had been savouring. It’s the sound of the front door opening as the little brother returns from school, parading his way into the house with the same level of noise as a small marching band. The atmosphere ruined, that person rises from his position on the bed and gradually lifts himself to his feet. With a look of bitter resignation on his face, he turns his gentle gaze on me once more before departing downstairs, likely to make himself a cup of tea. Leaping off the bed after him, I decide to follow. I could use a drink too, I think.
Patting at his legs, I try to divert his attention from the boiling kettle to my empty bowl. It takes a moment for it to register on his face, but then he seems to understand what it is I’m after. Opening the fridge to take out a bottle of milk, he pours a generous amount into my bowl, and then some more into his own cup for his tea. Purring gently, I lap away at the milk in my bowl as he makes his way back to the room he shares with his little brother.
Even if I have trouble understanding what bothers him, he seems to have no problems figuring me out. Perhaps I’m simply easier to read, or perhaps it’s just that humans are more complicated creatures than cats after all.
>> No. 634
>>652
Sentence structure at the beginning is a bit choppy. Other than that, bravo. I just skimmed through it though, will read it once I throw away this popsicle stick.
>> No. 635
HOW I EDIT POST
>> No. 637
>>652
I enjoyed reading it, it was good. But the sentences in passive voice you might want to change to active voice.
>> No. 638
>>656
Well, it might be excusable in first or second person in certain circumstances.
>> No. 639
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>>650
I don't have those ones, though.

>>656
A passive what now?
>> No. 640
>>658
When you describe the action as being done by something, it's active. When the action is being done to something, it's passive.
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>>659
Oh, right. Not sure if I completely understand, but I get what you mean, I think.
>> No. 642
>>658
Read the info in this link.
http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/passivevoice.html
>> No. 643
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>>661
Oh, so that's what it is. Sounds... complicated.
>> No. 644
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>>652
I'm glad I was finally able to read one of your stories, John; I rather like the self-representational quality this one has to it. It had a nice atmospheric quality to it as well, and I liked the reference to how cats have a tendency to 'claim' certain pieces of furniture for themselves.

I never did enjoy giving critiques, because it always means telling somebody what you believe they've done wrong, and I've always been naturally adversed to that. I won't get into the passive vs. active issue, as I've always felt the two can be equally effective when used in the right manner. Something I did find odd though, is the sentence that says "Nobody else sits in my chair, so it's mine alone." Personally, I read this as a statement of intent, similar to how a military squad captain might say something like "Nobody dies on my watch". If that's how you meant it, then it seems odd to include the "so it's mine alone" because that addition turns a command into a factual statement, like "Nobody uses that desk, so it gets incredibly dusty". Additionally, if it was meant as a factual statement, it wouldn't make sense for the younger brother to sometimes sit in the chair, because that directly contradicts what Mia is claiming only a few sentences earlier.
If you had the former meaning in mind, if Mia was in fact voicing the belief that the chair was hers, all you'd need to do is remove the "so it's mine alone". If you did that, the statement itself would make more sense, as would the younger brother using it against the cat's wishes. All that said, it was a good story; and you obviously enjoy writing. If you write any more in the future, i'd certainly like to read it.
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>>664
I love the way you express yourself Genji. You should try writting something as well.
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>>664
I haven't written anything for quite a while, actually. Usually I run out of motivation before I get even halfway through and just end up deleting the whole thing. Because of that, all I can manage these days are short stories every now and then.

That sentence was written that way to show that the chair isn't used very often, so the cat decided to claim it as her own. But every now and then someone does sit in the chair, much to the cat's disapproval. It's basically her asserting that the chair belongs to her, so nobody else is allowed to sit in it. But the little brother obviously doesn't understand this, so he sometimes goes and sits in the chair anyway.

I'll probably be writing more often from now, though. I've got a million and one ideas, but just need to find the motivation to actually write them down.

>>665
I agree with anon, though. I'd quite like to see a story written by you, since even your general posting style is very interesting to read as it is.
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>>666
Post them here, if you feel like doing it.
>> No. 648
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>>664
>feedback given like a gentleman and a scholar
You're one of the few who adhere the sammich method.
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>>665
>>666
I appreciate the compliment, but in all honestly I've always been absolutely dreadful when it comes to fictional prose. If I ever did write something in that category though, I'd probably like to do something Lovecraftian, as he's always been my favorite author. Even so, fiction is just so incredibly daunting to me, I'm not sure I'd ever be able to give it a go in earnest.

>>668
I don't believe I've ever heard of the sammich method, but thank you.
>> No. 650
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>>669
The sandwich method of providing feedback states that you must start with a compliment, then give the criticisms, then end with a compliment.

Positive-negative-positive, in other words. Most people tend to veer towards positive-negative, or negative-positive, or just positive-positive, or negative.
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>>666
>666
>> No. 652
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>> No. 653
>>672
kuriiningu stawp
>> No. 654
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654
>work for hours to no avail
>internet fixes itself
>> No. 655
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>>674
Internet here. u mad, George?
>> No. 656
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>>675

Iya, ureshii~
>> No. 657
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S-so cold.
>> No. 658
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>>677
Has your hair frozen too?
>> No. 659
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>>677
It is way too cold out.
>>673
?

(Duplicate images ahhhhh)
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>>674
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>>680
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